专题43 【读后续写】题型增分攻略四解析版
微技能7 环境细节描写 环境描写，可以起到融情于景的效果，衬托人物的内心世界。适当的环境描写可以有效推动故事情节的发展，烘托故事的高潮。如当故事中的人物在碰到困难时，往往要加大笔墨描写故事环境的黑暗、恐怖和不祥，“情景交融”，使读者倍感紧张。环境描写分为客观和主观两种角度，通常在描写时主客观交替进行。 技巧点拨 1.描写客观环境：从环境事物本身入手 ①可利用各种形容词，做到“有声，有色，有质感，有味道” 如：the songs of birds(鸟鸣），the thundering clouds(电闪雷鸣），the blue sky(蓝天）， the green grass (青草）， the fragile flowers(娇嫩的花），the fragrant roses(艳丽的玫 瑰）、the setting/rising sun(落日／冉冉升起的太阳） ②可利用动词，如下句中的动词wrapped；shinning；sees；turn将山一年四季中美 的描述得极为生动，有动有色。 2. 描写主观环境：从观察者角度描写 ①可利用Sb. found sth.adj./doing/done 某人发现某物（状态／动作／被）......； ②It was so adj. that we find/feel它是如此......以至于...... ③Sth. kept sb. amazed/sth. held sb. entirely in their power 景物让我完全惊呆了 精彩片段 片段1 Imagine mountains wrapped in silver water, shinning in the spring sun. Summer sees the mountains turn bright green with growing rice.During autumn, these same mountains are gold, and in winter they are covered in sheets of white frost.（有动有色， 四季颜色银、绿、金、白） 片段2 The dark(有色），rainy evening,the wind,the thundering(有声） clouds held me entirely in their power.We saw lots of great sights along the way. I closed my eyes in the speeding(有动） car.Winding(有动）rivers,lofty mountains,deep valleys and sunny beaches kept me amazed. 微技能8 故事高潮营造法 故事中的高潮也通常是故事的转折点（turning point),是指故事达到最紧张或扣人心弦的那一部分。高潮有时候是剧情中的“危机”点。有时它只是达到关键时刻或者转折点时，发生了一些事情，或者人物必须做出决定，从而导致一个结果或其他。 技巧方法1 增加冲突 增加冲突是一种有效的可以达到故事高潮的方式。冲突带来紧迫感，将故事推向事情的解决或崩溃。可从以下三个方面增加冲突 ： ①人物之间的冲突（人物观点不同，竞争需要等）； 点拨 ②人物与环境之间的冲突； ③增加障碍，让人物克服挑战。 方法2 放大内心冲突 放大人物内心活动冲突也有助于设置一个高度紧张和不确定的时刻。 精彩片段 现在来观察下面短文中的冲突是如何体现的 We were talking about engagement (订婚）when your grandfather had to go to war. It was the most terrible day of my life when he left. I was so afraid of losing him, the only way I could stay peaceful was to dance.(放大人物内心冲定）And then one day a letter came. There were only three sentences: “I have lost my leg. I am no longer a whole man and now give you back your freedom. It is best you forget about me. ”（増加障碍） Grandma continued to tell me that Grandfather was in hospital and she made her decision not to give him up.(放大人物内心冲突） She took her leave, and traveled away from the city. 2021年高考英语【读后续写】题型强化训练四解析版
跟踪检测·迁移应用 练模拟，练规范，夯基提能
Test 1
阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。续写的词数应为150左右。
I like all kinds of chocolate.Mother had bought a bar of it,and somehow I couldn't stop thinking about it.I was helping Father in the yard when I got the idea that I could cut off the end of that bar of chocolate.Mother would be sure to miss it,but before she had any idea who had done it,I could admit that I'd taken it to escape a spanking(挨揍）I waited until Mother was out feeding 。the chickens.Then I told Father I thought I'd go in for a drink of water.I got the bar down,but I heard Mother coming just when I had the knife ready to cut.So I slipped the chocolate into the front of my shirt and left quickly.Before I went back to help Father,I went to the barn(谷仓）and hid the chocolate there.
All the rest of afternoon,I didn't like to look at Father.Every time he spoke it made me jump.My hands began shaking so much that he asked me what was the matter.I told him it was just that my hands were cold.I knew he didn't believe me,and every time he looked my way my heart started pounding.I didn't want the chocolate anymore.I wanted a chance to put it back without being caught.
I was nearly out to where the cows were when I remembered what Father had said once-some of the family money was mine because I had helped to earn it.Why wouldn't it be all right to figure the bar of chocolate had been bought with my own money? That seemed to fix everything.But by the time I had the cows headed home,I had begun to worry again.I decided to leave the whole matter to the Lord.I picked up a dried stick and decided I would throw it up into the air and take my orders from the way it landed.If it pointed west.I'd take the whole bar back.If it pointed south.I'd take half an inch off the end.If it pointed east,I'd bought the bar with my own money and it wouldn't be stealing to keep it.I swung the stick as high as I could.When it came down,it pointed mostly west-but a little south.That night I couldn't sleep.I kept trying to
remember how much that stick had really been pointing to the south. Paragraph 1:
At last I got up,slipped out into the yard and took the ax(斧头）from the chopping block. Paragraph 2.
Then he stood me on my feet and asked if I thought I had deserved the spanking. 【经典范文】 Paragraph 1:
At last/got up, slipped out into the yard and took the ax from the chopping block .Then I went into the barn and took the chocolate outside.By the light of the moon,I was about to cut off the end of the bar when I heard\"Son!\"I couldn't think of a thing to say.I grabbed up the bar of chocolate and hid it next to my chest before l turned around.Father picked me up and took me over to the woodpile.I didn't know anybody could spank as hard as he did. Paragraph 2:
Then he stood me on my feet and asked if l thought I had deserved the spanking. He said it wasn't so much that I'd taken the chocolate,but that I'd tried to hide it from him.\"Son,\"he said,\"I know you help to earn the family money.We might say the chocolate was yours in the first place.You could have had it if you'd asked for it,but I won't have you being sneaky about things.
Test 2
On Friday evening, Emmett and I went to a movie as scheduled. After purchasing the tickets and drinks, we entered the cinema with delight beforehand, waiting for the beginning of the movie.
When I got up in the middle of the movie, Emmett whispered, “ Carter, where are you going?” “I forgot to call my mom to tell her what time to pick us up.” I whispered back, leaving my jacket on the seat. I squeezed past the people in my row, trying not to step on any feet while still watching the screen. I didn’t want to miss a thing. Balfour, the good guy in the movie, was trapped in an underground cave.
When I came back, Balfour’s flashlight almost went out. An enormous snake was moving toward him, twisting its body. Balfour struggled to loosen the chains around his hands and feet to reach his magic cape (魔法斗篷). With the cape around him, he could completely disappear.
I crawled (缓慢行进) back across eight people (I counted on the way out), never taking my eyes off the screen. I sat down in my seat slowly, then picked up my drink, and swallowed it quickly. But suddenly my brain said, “That’s not coke. That’s lemonade.” I looked down at the cup, just as the girl next to me shouted, “He drank my lemonade!”
“Shhhh!” the people around us said, making quiet complaints. “Where’s Emmett?” I asked, as if the girl had hidden him under her seat.
“Carter, down here,” Emmett answered in a low voice. He was two rows ahead of me. I was in the wrong row! Everyone was turning around to look at me.
“Here,” I said, handing the girl her drink.
“Eww,” she said. “You have had a drink of it, so you owe me a lemonade.” “Shhhh!” everyone said again.
“OK, OK,” I said, starting my crawl across eight sets of feet again. Everybody were complaining as I inched out.
“Don’t come back,” the boy on the end said. 注意:
1. 所续写短文的词数应为 150 左右；
2. 至少使用 5 个短文中标有下划线的关键词语； 3. 续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好； 4. 续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。
Paragraph 1
But the problem was that I had to come back to bring this girl a new lemonade. Paragraph 2
I thought about crawling out of this row and back into Emmett’s row, but I couldn’t. 【经典范文】
But the problem was that I had to come back to bring this girl a new lemonade. I bought a lemonade, took a deep breath, and went back. This time, I bent low, looking at every person on the end of each row. When I saw the same boy, I moved through fast to get back to that girl. Unfortunately, I stepped on a boy’s feet and banged my knee. After apologized to him, I quickly fell into the seat next to the girl and handed her the lemonade. Everyone around us all turned to stare at me again with some complaints. I thought about crawling out of this row and back into Emmett’s row, but I couldn’t. Maybe I would just stay there until the movie ended. Thanking me for the lemonade, the girl talked about the plots I missed. I whispered back, “Thanks.” When the lights of the cinema came on, I grabbed my jacket on the seat and hurried out. Emmett caught up with me, “Do you know that girl?” “No.” I answered. “Then why do you have her jacket?” I looked down and found a bright pink jacket. “Here I go again,” I said with embarrassment, spotting the girl in the crowd.
Test 3
A truck driver was enjoying his meal at a local restaurant when an old lady came in. To his surprise, the owner and all the servers hurried from behind the counter to meet her. “Mrs. Cosby!” They shouted, “How pleased to see you!” The old lady smiled and greeted them all.
Bob, the owner said, “Sit down and make yourself comfortable, Mrs. Cosby! What would you like to eat?”
When Bob passed his table, the truck driver could not resist to ask what is so special about the old lady.
“I’ll explain if you are interested,” Bob smiled.
“Every school seems to have a class that everyone thinks will never graduate. Troublemakers, that’s what we were. None of our teachers stayed for long. One morning, the door to the classroom opened and a new teacher walked in. We sure gave her a hard time. But she never lost her temper, no matter what we did.
“One day after a month, Mrs. Cosby opened her briefcase and took out a bunch of papers, something totally surprised us. She asked each one of us to come to the front of the class, one by one, and gave us each a paper. On each paper she had written what the student in question had been good at during the last month.
“No one had ever believed in us. No one ever liked us. We were constantly told how good-for-nothing we were. Gradually we had started to believe it ourselves. The teacher attitude we had met with before didn’t encourage us to hold belief in ourselves.
“Suddenly, there came someone who could find something positive to say about each and every one of us. Once she had delivered the papers, she continued with her teaching and for the first time we forgot to make her life miserable. Mrs. Cosby did this every month from then on. Each month we got a paper that emphasized our strengths, what we had been good at. We begin to act as if that was true. We start to learn more to be even better, to prove them right. With her positive teacher attitude, she transformed our class. 注意：
1. 所续写短文的词数应为150左右；
2. 应使用5个以上短文标有下划线的关键词语； 3. 续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好； 4. 续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词。 Paragraph 1:
“And then came the day of our graduation. Paragraph 2:
Bob went to get the bill and when he returned he saw the truck driver talking on his cell phone.
【经典范文】
“Then came the day of our graduation. Mrs. Cosby hugged every one of us, and told us with tears how proud she was of us. Then she handed each one of us a book. All the encouraging papers through the years were there, in hard cover. She wanted us to keep that book. Whenever we felt unworthy, open it and read how good we were. She was convinced that we could be anything we wanted to be as long as we believed in ourselves. So we did. She turned a bunch of troublemakers into people who could achieve great things. We went on to fulfill our dreams and make our life better. Mine was to own a restaurant and here I am. Now you understand why that old lady deserves all the respect we can give her.” The truck driver nodded. Then he asked for his bill. Bob went to get the bill and when he returned he saw the truck driver talking on his cell phone. “Honey? It is me. I thought I would drive home tonight. You might make that special noodles for me? Yes, I’d really like to have some. You should sell those noodles, they are so good, better than anyone else’s! What? Why do I say so? Well because I want to show my attitude. Just wanted to let you know you are the best cook I have ever met! That’s your strength! You will? Great, see you in the evening! Love you too!”
Test 4
The passengers on the bus watched sympathetically as the attractive young woman with a white walking stick made her way carefully up the steps. She paid the driver and, found the seat he’d told her was empty. Then she settled in and rested her stick against her leg. It had been a year since Susan became blind. Due to a medical misdiagnosis（误诊）, she was suddenly thrown into a world of darkness and frustration. And all she had to depend on was her husband, Mark. Mark was an Air Force officer. When she first lost her sight, he watched her sink into hopelessness and was determined to help he gain the confidence. Finally, Susan felt ready to return to her job, but how would she get there? She was now too
frightened to get around the city by herself. So, Mark drove her to work each day, even though they worked at opposite ends of the city.
At first, this comforted Susan. Soon, however, Mark realized the necessity for Susan to become independent and wanted her to start taking the bus again. Just as expected, Susan was afraid of this idea. But Make promised Susan that he would ride the bus with her until she got the hang of it.
For two weeks, Mark, in military uniform accompanied Susan to and from work each day. He taught her how to rely on her other senses, specifically her hearing, to tell where she was and how to adapt to her new surroundings.
At last, Susan decided that she was ready to try on her own. Monday morning arrived, and before she left, she hugged Mark. Her eyes was filled with tears of gratitude for his patience and love. She said good-bye, and for the first time, they went their separate ways.
Each day went perfectly, and Susan had never felt better. She made it.
On Friday morning, Susan took the bus to work as usual. As she was paying for the bus fare, the driver said, “Lady, I sure do envy you.” (340 words) 注意：
1. 所续写短文的词数应为150左右；
2. 应使用5个以上短文标有下划线的关键词语； 3.
续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语以为你写好；
4. 续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词。 Paragraph 1:
Curious, she asked the driver, “Why do you say that you envy me?” Paragraph 2:
Tears of happiness poured down Susan’s cheeks. 【经典范文】
Curious, she asked the driver, “Why do you say that you envy me?” The driver responded, “It
must feel good to be taken care of and protected like you are.” Confused, Susan asked again, “What do you mean?” The driver explained, “Well, you know, every morning for the past week, a fine looking gentleman in a military uniform has been standing across the corner watching you as you get off the bus. He makes sure you cross the street safely and he watches until you enter your office building. Then he blows you a kiss and walks away. You are a lucky lady.”
Tears of happiness poured down Susan’s cheeks. Although she couldn’t see him with her eyes, she had always felt that Mark was just there. She was such a lucky and happy lady, for her husband had given her a gift more powerful than sight, a gift that she could feel and didn’t need to see—the gift of love that can bring light where there is darkness.
Test 5
The Board Meeting had come to an end. Bob started to stand up and knocked into the table, spilling his coffee over his notes. ''How embarrassing! I am getting so clumsy(笨拙的) in my old age. ''
Everyone had a good laugh, and soon we were all telling stories of our most embarrassing moments. It came around to Frank, who sat quietly listening to the others. Someone said, ''Come on, Frank. Tell us your most embarrassing moment. ''
Frank laughed and began to tell us of his childhood. ''I grew up in San Pedro. My Dad was a fisherman. He had his own boat, but it was hard making a living on the sea. He worked hard and would stay out until he caught enough to feed a big family. Not just enough for our family, but also for his Mom and Dad and the other kids that were still at home. ''
He looked at us and said, ''I wish you could have met my Dad. He was strong from pulling the nets and fighting the seas for his catch. When you got close to him, he smelled like the ocean. No matter how much my mother washed his clothes, they would still smell of the sea and of fish. ''
Frank's voice dropped a bit. ''When the weather was bad, he would drive me to school. He had this old truck that he used in his fishing business. That truck was older than he was. Half the time, he would slam to a stop and the old truck would belch(喷出) a cloud of smoke. He would pull right up in front, and it seemed like everybody would be standing around and watching. Then
he would lean over and give me a goodbye kiss on the cheek and tell me to be a good boy. It was so embarrassing for me. Here, I was twelve years old. I was a big boy and my Dad would lean over and kiss me goodbye! ''
He paused and then went on, ''I remember the day I decided I was too old for a goodbye kiss. When we got to the school and came to a stop, he had his usual big smile. He started to lean toward me, but I put my hand up and said, 'No, Dad. ' '' ……
注意：1. 所续写短文的词数应为 150 左右； 2. 续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好； Paragraph 1:
It was the first time I had ever talked to him that way, and he had this surprised look on his face. Paragraph 2:
Frank got a funny look on his face, and the tears began to well up in his eyes. 【经典范文】 Paragraph 1:
It was the first time I had ever talked to him that way, and he had this surprised look on his face. I said, ''Dad, I'm too old for a goodbye kiss on the cheek. I'm too old for any kind of kiss. '' My Dad looked at me for the longest time, and his eyes started to tear up. ''You're right, '' he said. ''You are a big boy…a man. I won't kiss you anymore. '' Paragraph 2:
Frank got a funny look on his face, and the tears began to well up in his eyes. And he spoke. ''It wasn't long after that when my Dad went to sea and never came back. It was a bad weather day when most of the fishermen stayed in, but not Dad. He had a big family to feed. The ocean has swallowed him up.''
Test 6
Mary waited anxiously for her turn in the empty dressing room. Never had she been so nervous before. This competition was of vital importance to her comeback(复出）。“If I can win today,\" she said to herself, “I can dance on the national stage next month.” Three months ago, her left arm was seriously injured in a car accident. After the medical treatment, she began to recover slowly. She practiced over and over again in order to regain her dancing skills.
“Hi, Mary,” in rushed her friend Jessica. “How is your arm? Is it going to influence your performance?”
＂I guess it can be tolerated for I am to win the match, \"said Mary with a determined look. “Admirable! But I hear that a girl called Linda is really gifted and strong. She can be your real well-matched competitor. Come on!”
After Jessica left, Mary decided to practice her most difficult spin. “If I don't try harder, I won't grasp this chance. \"She thought. But her arm began to hurt, making her worried. \"Mary, what makes you think you have a chance tonight? \" she said to herself. After the pain was gone, she continued to warm up.
A slim girl hurried in and put down an equipment bag on the chair. Then, she took out her dance dress quickly and put it on skillfully. Seeing Mary, she smiled politely and said \"Hi, I'm Linda. I am the next one!\" Mary nodded in reply but felt uncomfortable.\" This is just my competitor. Because of her, I may lose tonight. \"Her mind was wandering when Linda let out a scream, \"Oh, God, I can't find my music tape!\" Linda searched her bag but in vain. \"It may be missing on the way.\" With these words, she then rushed out. 注意：
1.续写词数应为150左右；
2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。 Paragraph 1:
Suddenly, Mary caught sight of a black box under the chair where Linda put her bag.
Paragraph 2:
Hearing her name called, Mary walked on the stage with her heart beating faster and faster. 【答案】
Suddenly, Mary caught sight of a black box under the chair where Linda put her bag. She
went over and then opened the box to find Linda’s tape was just inside. At that time, she was in a dilemma, “This is my chance to defeat her.” But on a second thought, she changed her mind, “If I hide it, I will win the competition but I may lose something.” She placed it on the chair carefully, leaving a note saying “Take it easy, we are the best.” Soon, it’s her turn to come on the stage.
Hearing her name called, Mary walked on the stage with her heart beating faster and
faster. She kept reminding herself, “I have been practicing for so long, and I will certainly make it.” But the serious pain in her arm came again when she was performing the most difficult spin. She fell down on the stage. At that moment, Linda came back in low spirits. To her surprise and relief, she saw the tape and Mary’s note. With Mary’s kindness and encouragement, Linda finished her performance calmly and skillfully. Finally, Mary lost the game but she believed she had won everything.
Test 7
At Dana’s yard sale, Tim chose a baseball from the toys spread on the card table and asked about the price. Dana told him everything was a quarter except Nezumi, a cotton toy rat. It was grey with some cotton sticking out from the hole where an ear had been torn off.
“Nezumi is extra special, so he is ten dollars. He needs a safe new home.” Dana sighed. Tim laughed saying he didn’t have ten dollars. Dana laughed too and gave Nezumi to Tim as a free gift because he was her friend. When Tim whispered it was sort of old, Dana said old toys were the best. She then invited Tim to her birthday party the next evening, adding that her parents were giving her a real rat for her birthday. Tim was amazed and asked if it was a live rat.
“Of course.” Dana said.
At home, Tim’s mother showed him the gift she had bought for Dana. It was a knitting spool(针织线轴) shaped like a mushroom. Mom said Dana could knit a scarf for her doll. Tim sighed that Dana wasn’t a knitting kind of person but a rat kind of person. Mom laughed after knowing what had happened. Together they drove to the pet store, where Tim searched and
searched and selected a clear plastic ball, one in which the rat could run around on the floor safe from cats and dogs. Tim thought of Nezumi’s ear and decided Dana’s new rat would need this ball.
The next day, Dana brought cupcakes to class. When she handed a cupcake to Tim, she asked if Tim brought Nezumi to school as Nezumi liked to ride in backpacks. Tim was at a loss because Nezumi was at home on his bed. Then Dana asked what gift he was giving her. Tim replied it was a surprise. In silence they sat for a while before he heard Dana say her parents were giving her a new bike for her birthday instead of a live rat because they thought rats would bite things. 注意:
1. 所续写的短文词数应为 150 左右;
2. 续写部分分为两段,每段的开头语已为你写好; Para 1:
At home that afternoon, Tim stared at the plastic rat ball. Para 2:
All of a sudden, he had an idea. 【经典范文】
At home that afternoon, Tim stared at the plastic rat ball. Wondering about the use of the clear plastic ball if Dana had no rat, he started walking up and down the room with a frown on his face. Mom was surprised and asked him what was happening. Tim told her Dana wasn’t getting a live rat from her parents but a bike. As they were racking their brains (绞脑汁) to come up with an appropriate gift, Tim turn around and saw Nezumi on his bed.
All of a sudden, he had an idea. He lifted Nezumi and squeezing Nezumi into the plastic ball with great caution so that Nezumi would be safe from cats and dogs. Seeing this, Mom asked Tim whether he was giving Dana an old cotton rat with one ear as a gift, Tim nodded with a smile saying she would definitely like it. Looking at Mom’s confused expression, Tim added that Dana was a Nezumi kind of person who thought old toys were the BEST.
Test 8
In 1989, fresh out of high school, I had the difficult task of choosing a career path before college started in three months. In those days in Pakistan, there were limited choices: becoming a doctor or an engineer, or entering the financial world after getting a business degree. I wasn’t interested in engineering, so that I was left with medicine or business. I couldn’t decide.
My uncle suggested that I do a work placement(实习) to experience it for a month in an international company followed by a month in a hospital. After that, I could make a decision. It seemed like a good idea.
I was accepted for a month’s placement at a foreign bank in Karachi. I got a feel for how the world of finance functioned, made new friends, and generally enjoyed the mostly easy-going work surroundings.
The month passed rapidly, and soon I began working at a leading hospital in Karachi. The experience couldn’t have been more different. The hospital had a stressful environment. The days started early (at 7 am, compared to 9 am at the bank), and were filled with endless duties. And the night calls! This was crazy, working all day, through the night, and again the next day.
I began thinking about my two experiences. The bank had offered a more relaxing atmosphere, better working hours and less stress. The hospital was full of excitement, but the studying and training was difficult. It seemed that the business choice was going to win out.
Near the end of my month at the hospital, I was driving home after an especially busy night call. In front of me was a public bus, with college students sitting on the top. As the driver weaved through (穿梭) traffic, I could see the boys shaking from side to side. 注意：
1. 所续写短文的词数应为150左右；
2. 应使用5个以上短文中标有下划线的关键词语； 3. 续写部分分为两段，每段开头语已为你写好； 4. 续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语； Paragraph 1:
Suddenly, a boy fell off the back of the bus.
Paragraph 2:
The next day, when I went to the hospital to see the boy, all his family got up, with grateful smiles on their faces. 【经典范文】 Paragraph 1:
Suddenly, a boy fell off the back of the bus. He hit the road face down and rolled over. He lay still in the middle of the road as the bus sped away. None of the cars behind stopped. Thinking that he could die in a matter of minutes, I stopped my car and carefully examined the boy. With the help of some passers-by, I lifted the unconscious boy into the car and raced back to the hospital. After his family was contacted, and he was wheeled into emergency surgery, I drove home, exhausted but happy. Paragraph 2:
The next day, when I went to the hospital to see the boy, all his family got up, with grateful smiles on their faces. What a feeling it was to help save the life of another person! I spent the rest of the day in a state of the most fabulous mood I had ever experienced. Driving home that evening, I decided on my career path. Two months of placements could not do what 30 minutes’ helping an accident victim had done for me. This experience taught me that at times, the decisions are made for you—and that whatever happens is always for the best.
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